Varied
It's a nice piece, it has a lot of variation to keep it interesting which is something i don't find too often on Newgrounds music. All the various melodies are enjoyable and the instrumentation is great. The mixing/mastering is good too and there is little to fault other than perhaps it lacks a little direction. It's hard to tell where exactly its heading but i guess tha'ts part of the charm. Good work!
Nice
Some of the lyrics seemed a little lazy, not that much rhyme in there. But it's abstract and has a nice feel, i loved "blood red like the base of a guillotine". Another thing i always like is how original your beats are. You never have some generic hip-hop tune in the background and you always create an ambience with some interesting sounds and rhythms. Nice stuff
I have been reading a lot of my stuff at poetry nights and what I'm starting to do is hop between forms. The first half isn't really meant to be over a beat at all, and I only start writing to a beat on the line "I am the grim reaper". I think I'm fooling with the line between free form spoken word poetry and hip hop, and I definitely haven't gotten it yet.
On re-reading this though most of it is pretty lazy writing anyways, haha, just rambles without an edit. The only lines I find interesting now are the ones that contain what you picked out:
"Slow mow, withering, slick in that I'm melting. Stone only in my stoic eyes, frozen at coffee late at night, blood red like the base of a guillotine. Oh to be free"
Thanks for the feedback, it's much appreciated!
Pretty nice
I like the vocalish sound that takes center stage, it's interesting and the human touch (at least to my ear) adds some originality. I would say though that you've made this a 20 second loop when it could be a five second one. If your going to have the same section multiple times try and vary it a bit more, have some dynamic variation, or a section when some instruments drop out to keep it interesting. Very good for your first thing in reason though, that programs helluh confusing.
thx for the review, i sure do find Reason pretty confusing... xD
The loop is just a little part from a new song im working on, so stay tuned! :P
Eh...
I can't decide on a winner cause you were both sick. Just wanted to leave a review saying sweet competition and a great battle to finish it on. Awesome stuff!
Ha ha
That is super catchy! I just had to smile when the whistling melody came in. It all seems pretty well produced i mean perhaps a bit repetetive but other than that good stuff!
Hey thanks, great you like it!
I will maybe add some new stuff to it soon. :]
Murdaa
Crazy good flow and some great lyrics. Good battle though!
Dreamy drone
This is pretty sweet, i enjoy the repetition the tune is catchy enough to hold it. Perhaps the playing style could have varied a bit more as the piece went on with the guitar getting less and less staccatto and holding each note longer like a dream drifting away? Well anyhow i like it
Ha ha
I love shitty vocals! Nice song, catchy chorus, good lyrics.
Stirring
I really liked this, and im not sure why its got such a low score... Anyhow it has a nice set of instruments, an interesting structure (i like the slow start) and a really rousing melody and theme. Very epic and extremely well made!
All of my songs get low scores. =/ Guess there's someone out there who thinks pretty badly of me, eh?
I'm really glad you liked it though! There was something special about this piece when I was writing it, so I'm really happy someone else thought so too. Thanks for listening, and thanks for the really nice review!
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Joined on 4/13/08
Creating Oriental Atmosph 
